Those of you familiar with my weekly bletherings will know how I bewail the lack of writing time left me for writing once I’m done with work. (Well I’ve got to socialize too, you know. An eroticist needs inspiration!) My Tuesday teasers allow me an outlet for all the stories which never get written, but some ideas are a bit too complex to capture in two hundred words. Like a certain story with a Valentine’s theme which has been with me for a couple years, but which I never get the chance to put in print. I’m going to summarize the plot here, as so far it only exists in my head. Then some unscrupulous bastard can nick my idea and write it themselves. Makes all kinds of sense, no?
Oh, it may
be slightly rambling as there are various plot kinks (not those kind of kinks, oh
dirty-minded reader) which need ironing out. It begins dark and dangerous, but
ends up hot and rather sweet-natured, so stay with it. Here goes.
A young guy
in prison overalls is crashing through undergrowth, head bleeding, heart
pumping. He has memory flashes of a coach crash—all rending metal and fire.
Then of him and another burly criminal linked together, making it cross-country
until the other guy severs their ties (literally). Now he’s on his own and
knows he’s being pursued by the authorities. So when he stumbles on an
apparently empty lakeside house he stumbles there for protection.
A young
woman has retreated to her family’s lakeside cabin, having dumped her boyfriend
for cheating some weeks before Valentine’s Day. Now that the Day has arrived
she needs alone time, away from all happy dating couples. Her solitude is
interrupted however by noises out back and when she goes to investigate she
comes face to face with the young delirious convict; in panic he grabs and
restrains her with whatever he finds nearby. He ends up tying her up and
gagging her in the house. So far so scary.
The point of
view flashes back and forth between them. She’s terrified and assumes he’s a
dangerous psychopath. He, it becomes clearer, is a guy caught up in
circumstances beyond his control—a reluctant and concussed jail-breaker who’d
been serving his time as quietly as he could until the coach on which he was
being transported to some outside work project (or something) went careering
off the road and the other prisoners made a bid for freedom. Now he finds
himself on the run and having kidnapped someone who’s understandably scared
shitless of him. He ungags her eventually and attempts to talk her calm as he
grabs food and tries to focus on his options. She responds, at first through an
instinct of self-preservation, then gradually perceiving, though still
frightened, that he’s not the crazed monster she initially feared. Something of
an understanding (as much as is possible when one party is trussed up and
vulnerable) dawns between them.
Then he
views a TV news report about the mass breakout of convicts and his own picture
on the screen and breaks down completely. He was originally convicted for his
part in a robbery gone wrong, having got involved in the scheme to prevent the
family house being repossessed, his dad having been absent from the family home
since he was a boy. Now as a jail breaker and kidnapper he feels all out of
options. He has no way of making it to safety and even if he did make it across
the distant border would face life as an outlaw with no way of helping his
family again. Looking at the girl again he can’t believe what he’s done and is
emotionally in pieces. Having recovered sufficiently, he unties her and tells
her what the hell—call in the police. (See why I can’t just scribble off this
story in a few days? To make this shit convincing would take serious time!!!)
She goes to
make the call but has been moved enough by what she’s witnessed to hold off for
a while. She’ll tell them that she found him unconscious but that when he came
to, he told her to contact the police. Plus she’ll miss out the bit about the
kidnapping. Before phoning she’ll tend to his injured head, prepare him
something to eat and let him shower. Her decision is probably not uninfluenced
by the fact that he’s a good-looking boy with a worked-out prison yard
physique. Plus there’s that vulnerable-tough-guy factor and her realization that
beneath all his misfortune is a decent human being. Did I mention that in
appearance she’s a bosomy blonde cheerleading archetype with no illusions as to
how she appeals to certain male fantasies?
It should be
no surprise to the reader therefore when she joins him in the shower. The
erotic heart of the story would be his reaction to finding himself briefly
liberated from prison and being soaped down by a hot girl, and hers to having
the rotten ex-boyfriend she’d once thought perfect replaced on Valentine’s Day
by a muscular shaven-headed convict-on-the-run. There’s much hotness involving
passionate slippery kissing under the jets, soapy tit-fucking and hard shafting
against the tiled wall. Her fear all transformed via sympathy to rampant
excitement, she can’t resist teasing the fuck out of him before making him
explode—twice. He fucks with passion and gratitude, feasting on her however
little he feels he deserves it. In response to her lust he becomes more
strident, less controlled, but always retaining a thankful tenderness however
hard he fucks. By the time they’re both done, he is amazed by her and she in a
way by him. In short, and pardon me for resorting to visual shorthand, there’s
a whole lot of this:
The
authorities are duly called and she plays a blinder in explaining the
alternative version of what happened. I’m not yet sure what words pass between
them as they wait, but there’s a tender sadness between in the air. She has to
play another good game when questioned and then watches as he is taken away.
The focus stays with her confused thoughts as she views his departure in the
police van. Not the Valentine’s Day she would ever have planned, but one on
which something unique transpired between herself and a desperate stranger.
A possible
coda to the story takes place in prison when she visits him, but about that I’m
not yet sure. Whether the Valentine encounter should be a one-off or lead to a
possible something more I have yet to decide.
There it is—a
Valentine’s gift which I have yet to deliver. I’d be glad of any thoughts…




To start, if someone does steal your idea, they would never be able to write it as good as you would.
ReplyDeleteThe plot outline itself was written so beautifully. I was caught of guard thinking about the vulnerable tough guy, that it was a suprise my body reacted so strongly to your words of soapy tit fucks and hard fucking. Such a brilliant story idea. I really hope you find time at some point to write it. I will be sure to buy a copy. x x x